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‘Don’t you worry, Miss. It’s as strong as an ox. It won’t collapse under all your puny weight.’


Shirley drew herself up, saying coldly, ‘Maybe I should take the stairs.’ The grey old man shrugged,stepped into the elevator, pushed the button and slowly, the creaky beast rose with its burden.

‘Waiting for someone?’ said a voice behind her. She jumped and saw a young lady. ‘Oh, no’, she replied.’ Just waiting for the elevator to come back. Gone to drop off the old guy.’

The young lady’s eyes widened. ‘Not the grey man? Why, he’s been dead 50 years!’

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Word count: 100

This has been written in response to the above Picture Prompt


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Categories: Fiction

Nabanita · March 20, 2014 at 3:35 pm

Oooohhh spooky!!

EagleAye · March 20, 2014 at 3:56 pm

What a great ghost story! Love the descriptions you included. I could easily visualize the scene.

Aditi · March 20, 2014 at 4:50 pm

Spooky this one!

Beloo Mehra · March 20, 2014 at 5:45 pm

Creaky alright! Spooky too.

Shailaja V · March 20, 2014 at 6:14 pm

Are you scared yet? 😉

Shailaja V · March 20, 2014 at 6:14 pm

Thank you!

Shailaja V · March 20, 2014 at 6:15 pm

Thanks Aditi. Hope you liked it 🙂

Shailaja V · March 20, 2014 at 6:15 pm

Thanks Beloo 🙂

Ananya N · March 20, 2014 at 6:33 pm

Nice read 🙂

lizy-expat-writer · March 20, 2014 at 7:07 pm

I liked the juxtaposition of beast and burden, and that the elevator was going UP!

Shailaja V · March 20, 2014 at 7:31 pm

Thanks Ananya 🙂

Shailaja V · March 20, 2014 at 7:31 pm

He he he.. thanks for catching that, Lizy 😉

Kajal · March 20, 2014 at 7:52 pm

Spooky! But very nice 🙂

pviljoen · March 20, 2014 at 7:56 pm

uhm, I don't get the bit about the elevator going up? Going down would mean going underground and he wasn't? Still clever of her not to have gotten in with him.

Dawn Q. · March 20, 2014 at 9:37 pm

Perfect story for around a campfire! Well done and classic.

Psych Babbler · March 20, 2014 at 10:57 pm

Haha…freaky and creaky! 🙂

Carver · March 21, 2014 at 12:24 am

I love the shot you used to illustrate your creaky story. Well done.

nanclairefalkner · March 21, 2014 at 5:24 am

Good ghost story building! I wonder if the lift fell and that's how he died? Great job! Nan 🙂

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields · March 21, 2014 at 9:35 am

Dear Shailaja,

I'll bet she's glad she didn't get in that elevator with the grey guy. It took me a couple of reads to catch it but when I did it sent a chill down my spine. Well done.

Shalom,

Rochelle

Siobhan · March 21, 2014 at 5:12 pm

Well crafted. I'm relieved she didn't take the elevator

Rajesh · March 21, 2014 at 6:46 pm

Wow! spooky

JudahFirst · March 22, 2014 at 2:03 am

That was wonderful! It's funny how this photo lends itself to the creepy and weird! Nice job!!

Patrick Prinsloo · March 22, 2014 at 2:08 pm

Uh oh. Scary. Well done.

janet · March 22, 2014 at 2:53 pm

Nicely creepy.

janet

Aparna · March 22, 2014 at 4:33 pm

Nice take on the pic :).

Scattered Mama · March 23, 2014 at 5:12 pm

Gosh! Spooky!

P.S. Joshi · March 23, 2014 at 8:02 pm

Good story and well written with a chilling ending. At least he was a fairly friendly ghost.

Atreyee · March 24, 2014 at 9:25 pm

How ghastly-I mean ghostly ;-)Loved this spooky story Shailaja:-)

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