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Those salty traitors stung my pupils as I looked at the devastation all around.
The voices of self-reproach were getting louder in my head.
How I wished I had let them do it. How I wished I hadn’t done everything.
My eyes took in the enormous piles of disarray lying about.

The messy room sniggered.
This is written in response to Write Tribe’s 55 on Friday
The prompt for this Friday was 

how I wished

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Categories: Fiction

Shailaja V

Hi there! I'm Shailaja Vishwanath, a blogger with 12 years of blogging experience and a parent to a teen. I work as a digital marketing and social media consultant. From positive parenting tips to useful productivity hacks, social media advice to blogging advice, you'll find them all right here. Welcome to my blog.


Aparna · February 23, 2014 at 3:07 am

Couldn't help but wonder if this was a mom's point of view 😉 ? Nice one, Shailaja!

Shailaja V · February 23, 2014 at 3:09 am

What do you think, Aparna? 😉 Of course it is a mom's point of view and probably about how pointless it all is 😉

Kalpana Solsi · February 23, 2014 at 7:54 am

The mess in the room is unwelcome…………..

Psych Babbler · February 23, 2014 at 10:13 am

Nightmare of every mother I suppose…but yes, not doing everything and letting them do it is probably the best! 😀

Sreeja Praveen · February 23, 2014 at 10:51 am

Aaha ! Well, isn't this what we all think when we see a messy room ! Loved the doting mom's take here 🙂

Archana · February 23, 2014 at 2:57 pm

i don't have any wishes like that.. i either let her do it, or let the room be messy!!! 😀 gave up long ago!!

Scattered Mama · February 23, 2014 at 5:26 pm

Messy room and self reapproch is of course an everyday affair! what I love is the the complete edge of the seat suspense created with a mundane event. You write brilliantly Shailaja!

Shailaja V · February 23, 2014 at 6:18 pm

Have I told you what a great motivator you are? 🙂 Comments like yours push me to keep trying and keep writing. Thanks for that, SM!

Shailaja V · February 23, 2014 at 6:18 pm

Sigh.. it most definitely is…

Shailaja V · February 23, 2014 at 6:19 pm

Ha, but it's quite likely that the mess will remain, probably like the ruins of Hampi 😉

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 3:58 am

Yes, I am sure every mother has thought this, mine included 😉 Thank you Sreeja 🙂

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 3:59 am

Ha ha Archana. There are days when I do just that!

vishalbheeroo · February 24, 2014 at 8:52 am

Interesting take and such a pleasure to read your 55-er:)

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 9:35 am

Thanks Vishal. Glad you enjoyed it 🙂

Michelle Liew · February 24, 2014 at 11:37 am

Cool…..messes are monsters, aren't they?

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 11:48 am

Sigh.. don't even begin to ask me how big they get!

Nabanita · February 24, 2014 at 3:42 pm

mom's point of view 🙂

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 4:41 pm

Yep and the wife's and daughter's and woman's 😉

Shilpa Garg · February 25, 2014 at 7:11 pm

Aah! In our case, it is not a messy room, but messy rooms as sonny boy likes to leave his footprints wherever he goes. *SIGH*

Shailaja V · February 26, 2014 at 4:06 am

He he he.. I can only imagine the 'fun' it must be with boys around the house!

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