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Those salty traitors stung my pupils as I looked at the devastation all around.
The voices of self-reproach were getting louder in my head.
How I wished I had let them do it. How I wished I hadn’t done everything.
My eyes took in the enormous piles of disarray lying about.

The messy room sniggered.
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This is written in response to Write Tribe’s 55 on Friday
The prompt for this Friday was 

how I wished

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Categories: Fiction

Aparna · February 23, 2014 at 3:07 am

Couldn't help but wonder if this was a mom's point of view 😉 ? Nice one, Shailaja!

Shailaja V · February 23, 2014 at 3:09 am

What do you think, Aparna? 😉 Of course it is a mom's point of view and probably about how pointless it all is 😉

Kalpana Solsi · February 23, 2014 at 7:54 am

The mess in the room is unwelcome…………..

Psych Babbler · February 23, 2014 at 10:13 am

Nightmare of every mother I suppose…but yes, not doing everything and letting them do it is probably the best! 😀

Sreeja Praveen · February 23, 2014 at 10:51 am

Aaha ! Well, isn't this what we all think when we see a messy room ! Loved the doting mom's take here 🙂

Archana · February 23, 2014 at 2:57 pm

i don't have any wishes like that.. i either let her do it, or let the room be messy!!! 😀 gave up long ago!!

Scattered Mama · February 23, 2014 at 5:26 pm

Messy room and self reapproch is of course an everyday affair! what I love is the the complete edge of the seat suspense created with a mundane event. You write brilliantly Shailaja!

Shailaja V · February 23, 2014 at 6:18 pm

Have I told you what a great motivator you are? 🙂 Comments like yours push me to keep trying and keep writing. Thanks for that, SM!

Shailaja V · February 23, 2014 at 6:18 pm

Sigh.. it most definitely is…

Shailaja V · February 23, 2014 at 6:19 pm

Ha, but it's quite likely that the mess will remain, probably like the ruins of Hampi 😉

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 3:58 am

Yes, I am sure every mother has thought this, mine included 😉 Thank you Sreeja 🙂

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 3:59 am

Ha ha Archana. There are days when I do just that!

vishalbheeroo · February 24, 2014 at 8:52 am

Interesting take and such a pleasure to read your 55-er:)

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 9:35 am

Thanks Vishal. Glad you enjoyed it 🙂

Michelle Liew · February 24, 2014 at 11:37 am

Cool…..messes are monsters, aren't they?

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 11:48 am

Sigh.. don't even begin to ask me how big they get!

Nabanita · February 24, 2014 at 3:42 pm

mom's point of view 🙂

Shailaja V · February 24, 2014 at 4:41 pm

Yep and the wife's and daughter's and woman's 😉

Shilpa Garg · February 25, 2014 at 7:11 pm

Aah! In our case, it is not a messy room, but messy rooms as sonny boy likes to leave his footprints wherever he goes. *SIGH*

Shailaja V · February 26, 2014 at 4:06 am

He he he.. I can only imagine the 'fun' it must be with boys around the house!

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