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Crimson spots
Dotting the mantle
drop 
by 
drop

The dagger dripped
The wrist gaped
The hand trembled
The mouth curved

A wicked smile danced
Watching the victim

Why? 
she entreated
Because I never leave
 replied her image
Laughing back from the mirror

Source: davic via Compfight cc


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Linking up with YeahWrite’s GargleBlaster grid #157


Click on the link to read more fascinating 42-word entries to this week’s question:

Do you see her much?


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cynk · April 14, 2014 at 1:11 am

I like the twist ending.

Pratibha · April 14, 2014 at 4:07 am

Just how do you all manage to write so much!!! Love the ending.

sulekkha · April 14, 2014 at 5:23 am

A fabulous piece of creative writing. Loved the imagery.

PhenoMenon · April 14, 2014 at 5:46 am

Like both the ending lines and the snap

PhenoMenon
http://throodalookingglass.com/2014/04/lamp-light/

Beloo Mehra · April 14, 2014 at 6:19 am

Very creatively done!

Beauty Interprets, Expresses, Manifests the Eternal

Archana K B · April 14, 2014 at 6:49 am

you meant suicide??

Shailaja V · April 14, 2014 at 6:53 am

Thank you so much, Cynk 🙂

Shailaja V · April 14, 2014 at 6:53 am

Thanks Pratibha! I love writing for prompts 🙂

Shailaja V · April 14, 2014 at 6:54 am

Thank you Pheno 🙂 I was tempted to use one of your knife images 😉

Shailaja V · April 14, 2014 at 6:54 am

Coming from you, that is a lovely compliment, Sulekha 🙂

Shailaja V · April 14, 2014 at 6:55 am

Thank you for reading, Beloo 🙂

Shailaja V · April 14, 2014 at 6:56 am

Well, she has slashed her own wrists. I was going for split personality syndrome, more than suicide 🙂

Anita · April 14, 2014 at 7:02 am

Scary! Power packed 42 words, Shailaja 🙂

habibadanyal · April 14, 2014 at 8:42 am

MPD? Spooky!

Srilakshmi Indrasenan · April 14, 2014 at 10:19 am

Awesome, spooky, and a novel ending!

~S(t)ri
Smile, it makes (y)our day!

Madhura · April 14, 2014 at 10:26 am

This was creepy, spooky, scary! And I loved every word.. Beautifully done, and I love the photo, too 🙂

Kathy Combs · April 14, 2014 at 10:28 am

This was a bit scary. Nice job! ♥

Mridubala · April 14, 2014 at 11:45 am

Great imagination!

Nabanita · April 14, 2014 at 1:27 pm

And she is seen much …Gud one..

Do you see her much?-Random Thoughts Naba

Pixie · April 14, 2014 at 1:53 pm

ooh! That was brilliant!!

christina · April 14, 2014 at 3:04 pm

well now!
love the voice in this. love it all, actually. 🙂

sue · April 14, 2014 at 3:31 pm

Oh very nice! I might enter but wanted to see how off the wall my entry will be

JannaTWrites · April 14, 2014 at 3:55 pm

Oh! I didn't expect the twist of the mirror – nicely done. Sometimes we are our own worst enemy (no matter what personality we're reflecting 🙂 )

tulika singh · April 14, 2014 at 6:32 pm

Brilliantly done. It's scary when you are the victim as well as the killer.

Madhura · April 14, 2014 at 6:58 pm

Spooky, scary… And I love it! 🙂 Very beautifully done!
(I had commented earlier, I don't know where that comment is lost!)

Kir · April 14, 2014 at 8:07 pm

I hurt with her, as if mental illness takes its toll.
“because I never leave” this is how it robs you of “todays”

wow.

psychochef · April 15, 2014 at 3:45 am

Shailaja, this is really great. I like how you took the prompt in such a unique direction. Karen

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:09 pm

Glad I could spook you, Anita 🙂

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:09 pm

Yep! Came through, eh? 😉

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:10 pm

Thank you Sri 🙂

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:10 pm

Just a bit, eh? Thanks for reading, Kathy 🙂

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:11 pm

Thank you for stopping by, Mridubala! Very happy 🙂

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:18 pm

Thanks Naba 🙂

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:19 pm

Thank you so much, Christina!

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:19 pm

Thank you *bows low in gratitude*

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:25 pm

Glad you entered. Loved your entry!

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:26 pm

True that, isn't it? Our own worst enemy and not necessarily in a physical harm kind of way. Thanks Janna!

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:28 pm

Very much so, Tulika. Thank you for reading 🙂

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:29 pm

Oh, I wonder where it went, Madhura. I didn't see it in my inbox either. Thank you for commenting again 🙂

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:31 pm

Kir, coming from you,that is a huge compliment. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment 🙂

Shailaja V · April 15, 2014 at 5:31 pm

Wow Karen. High praise from the YW winner herself 🙂 Thank you so much!

Jennifer Hall · April 15, 2014 at 7:33 pm

Crimson is a great word!

Gina · April 15, 2014 at 10:38 pm

I got the split personality feel from this!

Christine Hanolsy · April 15, 2014 at 11:27 pm

Yikes, what a terrible way to go! I like the very flat emotion of the second stanza. It's so matter of fact in the face of her pain. Nice contrast. Thanks for linking this up!

Larks · April 16, 2014 at 6:19 am

Ooh, self mutilation courtesy of insanity, maybe? Creepy, nicely flowing piece!

Atreyee · April 16, 2014 at 7:43 am

Eerie as well as scary-a double bonanza Shailaja-well done 🙂

howanxious · April 16, 2014 at 9:23 am

How it is when we are both the culprit and the victim… Interesting write. And you portrayed the pain carefully.. but still it was a painful read.

tinsenpup.net · April 16, 2014 at 12:36 pm

This is very dark and very clever. Great job!

Jen Brunett · April 16, 2014 at 2:07 pm

ooh great ending, especially. Fab!!

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 2:57 pm

Thank you Jennifer. I adore that word and thought I would start my piece with it 🙂

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 2:58 pm

Oh Yay! I was going for that and so pleased that it came across, Gina! Thank you 🙂

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 2:58 pm

Christine, thanks for catching that contrast 🙂 I needed to convey that split in the personality and hoped this would do the trick. Thank you for commenting 🙂

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 2:59 pm

Insanity, split personality- whatever works, Larks 🙂 So glad you liked the flow!

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 2:59 pm

Aww,, thanks Atreyee! Coming from you, that's a great compliment!

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 3:00 pm

Thank you! Hope it didn't cause you too much pain.

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 3:00 pm

Oh thank you! Very sweet of you to say so!

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 3:01 pm

Jen, I loved yours too 🙂 Thanks for stopping by 🙂

whimsygizmo · April 16, 2014 at 3:02 pm

Ooooo. Terrifying.

Shailaja V · April 16, 2014 at 3:07 pm

Hope you're sufficiently frightened 🙂

Vaisakh Venugopal · April 20, 2014 at 10:30 am

That was quite creative! Good ending.. 🙂

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