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Wispy strands of hair flew out from under the red beret perched smartly on her head.
 Her cool gaze traveled over the cliff and into the water, as the huge waves crashed onto the beach below.
With one hand, she pulled out a camera from the confines of her overcoat.
 Carefully, she adjusted the focus on the lens, so that the background wouldn’t overshadow the subject.
She calmly peered through the view finder and snapped a picture.

Two white arms and one terrified head struggled to stay above the surging, white foam.
The loud, gut-wrenching yells were ripped from his throat and slammed into the unforgiving cliff, lost forever in their stoic stature.
As she turned to walk away, she glanced back for one second to ensure that he was gone.
He would never, ever hurt another human being again.

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This is my entry for Day 1 of the week-long Festival of Words for Write Tribe
Today’s theme was to write a piece of fiction which was exactly 9 sentences long
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Categories: Fiction

Suzy · March 2, 2014 at 3:55 am

OMG that was quite a twist to your tale. Snapped a picture or James Bond style shot him with the camera! Dropping by from WT day 1.

Ananya N · March 2, 2014 at 4:05 am

Enjoyed reading it !

jyothisdayout.com · March 2, 2014 at 4:45 am

Why would she want to keep a memory of such a man? That too of him dying? That is cold hatred! Ouch. 🙂

Roshan Radhakrishnan · March 2, 2014 at 5:12 am

superb 😀 I loved it… perfect post to start off WT. The perfect crime.

shellymona · March 2, 2014 at 5:54 am

Maybe those pictures would give her a kind of pleasure (Sadistic)
But the twist was lovely….

KParthasarathi · March 2, 2014 at 5:57 am

Such men are good riddance and there isan inexplicable elation at the end of such wicked persons.A good story

tulika singh · March 2, 2014 at 6:15 am

Whew.. that was vicious. Wonder what he'd done to her! But loved the cold blooded precision with which she went about it.

Pixie · March 2, 2014 at 7:05 am

Good riddance to bad rubbish I say!
And she did good by calmly taking pics even!

Eli Z · March 2, 2014 at 7:48 am

What a surprising twist… from a casual stroll along the sea shore… to … wow! Nicely told… He must have been cruelty himself?:-)

nibhz · March 2, 2014 at 8:22 am

Woah!! what a twist! Calm with courage!

Mina Menon · March 2, 2014 at 8:29 am

The satisfaction of a well devised plan executed with perfection!

Sreeja Praveen · March 2, 2014 at 9:09 am

OH…the first thought I had was that she was a wildlife photographer or something. The twist was totally unexpected and hence even more delicious 🙂 Too good 🙂

Michelle Liew · March 2, 2014 at 9:25 am

Oh my. You've got me frightened of using my camera, now! 🙂 Enjoyed the twist!

Damaria Senne · March 2, 2014 at 10:07 am

Wow! That's one scary woman.

Corinne Rodrigues · March 2, 2014 at 10:11 am

I love how you built this up in just nine sentences, Shy! The imagery is fantastic.

Vidya Sury · March 2, 2014 at 10:45 am

Grim and gripping, Shailaja! 🙂 A big hi-five to you!

juzta mom · March 2, 2014 at 10:49 am

Wow quite a twist Shailaja!

Jini Fernandez · March 2, 2014 at 11:31 am

Oops!!!Your protagonist had loads of guts, i should say. Loved your description.

Kajal Kapur · March 2, 2014 at 11:51 am

A vicious tale indeed. Quite a twist.Nice tale, though.

Prasanna Rao · March 2, 2014 at 12:58 pm

That was quite some narrative and loved the superb twist in the end. Well, I'm sure that he deserved what he got. Wonderful story 🙂

dxbnidblog · March 2, 2014 at 1:07 pm

this is write very much for the fow.so elegant and grasping and i have done so amateur.dxbnidblog.

Usha Menon · March 2, 2014 at 1:19 pm

Wow a scary story ! The twist in end was a big surprise. Very well narrated.

takeawalkinthewoods · March 2, 2014 at 3:22 pm

For some reason, many entries in this prompt are on the negative violent side!!!
However, good description. The contrast came out well.

Richa Singh · March 2, 2014 at 5:51 pm

master stroke! Loved it and smoothly done 😀

Richa

Psych Babbler · March 2, 2014 at 6:51 pm

Loved it…great twist in the end that I didn't see coming. 🙂 I wrote on a similar theme…

thewordtrance · March 2, 2014 at 7:33 pm

What a twist ! Well- written.

vishalbheeroo · March 2, 2014 at 9:43 pm

Thrilling and fantastic narrative. What a twist, woah and dramatic end:) I'm smiling.
http://vishalbheeroo.wordpress.com/2014/03/02/day-1-wtfw-9-sentence-fiction-bonding-over-pani-puri/

Rajlakshmi · March 3, 2014 at 3:30 am

Waaoo that's quite dark… Loved the twist. The narration is quite gripping too

Amrit Rukhaiyaar · March 3, 2014 at 4:50 am

I so loved the narration, the plot was really great though but it was the narration that steals the show here 🙂

Aditi · March 3, 2014 at 5:34 am

Oh wow! What a twist…Sleek…Can't wait to see what you'll churn out throughout the festival! 🙂

sulekkha · March 3, 2014 at 5:59 am

She took a picture to make sure he was finally gone from her life for good. Dark and bold story, loved it.

ROHAN KACHALIA · March 3, 2014 at 7:42 am

WOW!! What a twist in the end… brilliant narration! 🙂

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 7:49 am

He he he.. Yes. I thought would have her push him first, then decided to leave that to the readers to decide 😀

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 7:49 am

Thanks Ananya!

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:10 am

You can just imagine then that the pain she must have endured at his hands. 🙂

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:13 am

Thanks for the compliment, Roshan!

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:15 am

Yes, they would. And serve as a reminder that she is truly free now.

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:15 am

Thanks KP!

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:17 am

I guess there's a little devil inside me, after all 😀

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:17 am

Yes she did! Thank you!

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:18 am

Oh yes, he was! The things he has done are too terrible to write about.

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:22 am

Totally. She kept her head!

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:26 am

Cold, calculated and cunning, right?

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:28 am

Yay! So glad you didn't expect the ending!

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:29 am

No, no.. please click. I promise not to send anyone else off cliffs again. Then again, it does seem like fun 😉

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:29 am

Isn't she? Wonder what would happen if I met her.

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:32 am

Thanks Corinne. Sometimes the mind just cooperates and writes 😀

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:32 am

High-five right back, Vidya! You are a great inspiraton 🙂

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:32 am

Thanks!

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:33 am

Yep. You don't want to mess with her 😉

Shailaja V · March 3, 2014 at 8:33 am

Wasn't it though? Thank you!

Anita · March 3, 2014 at 8:33 am

What a story, Shailaja! One revenge, it is! 🙂

Shilpa Garg · March 3, 2014 at 2:42 pm

OMG!! That was chilling!! He must have hurt her A LOT!!

Dr. Gauri Kekre · March 4, 2014 at 9:51 am

I got goosebumps, Shailaja! What a story!

Vidya Lohith · March 4, 2014 at 11:54 am

I so wish every women portrayed this courage 😉

geeta nair · March 17, 2014 at 12:10 pm

A post with a tinge of mystery. Loved the style, the narration and of course the plot.

Shailaja V · May 4, 2014 at 5:52 am

Thank you Prasanna!

Marcy · May 4, 2014 at 12:32 pm

I liked how the first half set up the expectation that this was about enjoying a peaceful moment in nature, and then, yikes!

Natalie DeYoung · May 4, 2014 at 4:51 pm

Ooo, dark in the turn!

Shailaja V · May 4, 2014 at 5:42 pm

I am sure you have done wonderfully, Nid!

Shailaja V · May 4, 2014 at 5:44 pm

Thank you Usha madam 🙂

Shailaja V · May 4, 2014 at 5:44 pm

Maybe it has something to do with the month 😉 March is the God of War 😀

Shailaja V · May 4, 2014 at 5:47 pm

Thank you very much, Richa!

Shailaja V · May 4, 2014 at 5:49 pm

Thank you so much, Psych!

kimjam · May 6, 2014 at 12:16 am

Wow, a very unexpected ending – loved it!

Linda Roy · May 7, 2014 at 11:29 pm

Wow! This is powerful and so vivid. Shivers.

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