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Desire dripped from his devilish leer as he eyed the woman at the door.

 “And who might you be, my pretty?”

Sir,I’m Iris. I am here with a warrant for your arrest.’

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Written for the Trifecta Challenge
This week’s challenge:
You’ve got exactly 33 words and one of them must be a palindrome:

 a word or a phrase that reads the same forwards and backwards

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Categories: Fiction

Ally · March 10, 2014 at 3:11 pm

ha! Ouch

This made me smile,

That serves him right for ogling!

Nitin Nadig · March 10, 2014 at 3:19 pm

Perfect!

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 3:22 pm

Certainly does 😉

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 3:23 pm

Thanks Nitin!

Michelle Liew · March 10, 2014 at 3:53 pm

Well, now it serves him right!

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 4:10 pm

Glad you agree, Michelle 🙂

Kamini · March 10, 2014 at 4:18 pm

Loved the climax 🙂

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 4:20 pm

Thanks Kamini 🙂

Kalpana Solsi · March 10, 2014 at 4:52 pm

Serves him right , Shailaja. I am loving it.
A lovely story in 33 words.

Kalpana Solsi · March 10, 2014 at 4:56 pm

Coined the palindrome very cleverly.

Sheethal Susan Jacob · March 10, 2014 at 5:10 pm

I loved the ending…. eventhou it makes me wonder what happened next…

Shilpa Garg · March 10, 2014 at 5:11 pm

That's a good one!! Liked the palindrome you chose and how it fitted so well in the story with just 33 words! Cool, Shailaja 🙂

Flippa Bird · March 10, 2014 at 5:17 pm

Oooh the intrigue! Loved it!! 🙂

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 5:28 pm

Thanks, Kalpana! I aim to please 😉

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 5:31 pm

We had a list of palindromes to choose from. I picked this one 🙂

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 5:38 pm

Thanks Sheethal! Maybe I'll extend it into a longer post 🙂

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 5:46 pm

Thanks for the compliment, Shilpa 🙂

Shailaja V · March 10, 2014 at 5:48 pm

Thanks Flippa!

trudgingthroughfog · March 10, 2014 at 7:29 pm

Ooo, apparently he deserves what he's getting!

Tom MacInnes · March 11, 2014 at 1:28 am

Great story told in those 33 words. Love the twist at the end. Well done. 🙂

iwrotethose.com · March 11, 2014 at 3:57 am

Brilliant !!! 33 words of pure awesomeness 🙂

Shailaja V · March 11, 2014 at 11:30 am

Oh, you bet he does 🙂

Shailaja V · March 11, 2014 at 11:30 am

Thank you kindly, Tom 🙂

Shailaja V · March 11, 2014 at 11:31 am

Very glad you think so, Sid 🙂 Thanks for stopping by!

Wordifull Melanie · March 11, 2014 at 12:10 pm

Cool 33 🙂

Shailaja V · March 11, 2014 at 12:31 pm

Thanks Melanie 🙂

Kathy Combs · March 11, 2014 at 1:17 pm

This is so clever! I love it. Well done! ♥

Shailaja V · March 11, 2014 at 1:20 pm

That warms my heart, Kathy! Thank you 🙂

Sreeja Praveen · March 11, 2014 at 1:21 pm

Wonderful !! I'm amazed. What a beautiful blend ! 🙂

Shailaja V · March 11, 2014 at 1:25 pm

Sreeja, flattery will get you everywhere 😀 Thank you!

tulika singh · March 11, 2014 at 1:43 pm

Heh heh heh.. That must've wiped off the sneer in a jiffy! Just love the surprises you spring.

Shailaja V · March 11, 2014 at 3:01 pm

Thrilled that you like them 🙂

Debbie · March 11, 2014 at 8:24 pm

Well done! ☺ Nice touch to have the last line read the same backwards as well as forwards.

lovethebadguy.com · March 12, 2014 at 4:26 am

Heh heh. Shut down in a most awesome sense. Great work!

Shailaja V · March 12, 2014 at 6:52 am

Thanks Debbie 🙂

Shailaja V · March 12, 2014 at 6:52 am

You bet he got shut down 😀 Thank you for the appreciation!

Richa Singh · March 12, 2014 at 1:31 pm

This one was one helluva twist! And well rather well done 😀

Richa

kymm · March 12, 2014 at 3:34 pm

Well, there's a quick turn around for you! Nice one!

Shailaja V · March 12, 2014 at 3:50 pm

Thanks Richa!

Shailaja V · March 12, 2014 at 3:57 pm

You bet! Thanks!

Aparna · March 12, 2014 at 4:12 pm

Did you know I love palindromes.. find them so cool :). Super cool story as well!!

Shailaja V · March 12, 2014 at 4:18 pm

Aren't they? Simply lovely things. Yay! Thanks for liking the story 🙂

Valerie Boersma · March 12, 2014 at 9:03 pm

I love this!! I bet that devilish leer is gone now! Well done with your wonderful little palindrome piece!

whimsygizmo · March 13, 2014 at 12:05 am

The plot thickens…
Love it.

The Purple Assassin. · March 13, 2014 at 8:45 am

Indeed a beautiful short story.

Shailaja V · March 13, 2014 at 8:46 am

Oh thank you Valerie! Quite an honour coming from you 🙂

Shailaja V · March 13, 2014 at 8:47 am

Wondering how it will turn out? 😉

Shailaja V · March 13, 2014 at 8:47 am

Thank you! Glad that you stopped by!

Anita · March 13, 2014 at 10:48 am

Ok! Under arrest!
Arresting piece of work in 33 words!!! 🙂

cshowers · March 13, 2014 at 11:00 am

Haha! Good one – serves the dirty old lecher right. 🙂

Shailaja V · March 13, 2014 at 11:49 am

And I am glad you're here, Anita 🙂

Shailaja V · March 13, 2014 at 12:42 pm

Glad you think so 🙂

nibhz · March 13, 2014 at 2:38 pm

Crisp in 33 words!

joe2poetry · March 13, 2014 at 6:46 pm

Honey trap!!!!

Turok Tucker · March 14, 2014 at 2:32 am

“Desire dripped from his devilish leer” That is brilliant. I think you've captured a scene perfectly here, with so much depth in 33 words. Very unique palindrome as well. Nice work!

Shailaja V · March 14, 2014 at 5:01 am

Nibhz, remember what I said about writing everyday? These are do-able 🙂

Shailaja V · March 14, 2014 at 5:02 am

Oh yeah 😉

Shailaja V · March 14, 2014 at 5:04 am

Turok, thank you for those kind words 🙂 Glad to see you here!

humantriumphant · March 17, 2014 at 12:14 am

Go Iris! Great twist.

Shailaja V · March 17, 2014 at 3:26 am

Thank you! Glad you stopped by!

Trifecta · March 17, 2014 at 11:19 am

Take him down, Iris! Thanks for linking up. I enjoyed this.

Shailaja V · March 17, 2014 at 11:54 am

WOOHOO! So glad to see you here 🙂 Thank you for providing such an amazing platform for all writers. You will be missed sorely after March.

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