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Acutely awake I lie on my quilt Contemplating 
Should I have said something? She was a stranger It shouldn’t matter
But why did I feel the hurt The wrenching, searing pain That comes from self-pity
The image of her scorn rises before me

The look she gave Spoke a thousand words
She looked down upon me
On my creased forehead

On my unshaped eyebrows

On my untrimmed locks

On my unironed shirt
Quite quietly, she sized me up

Saying a lot without saying a word
Turning I glanced at my newborn Sucking his thumb
And I smiled;

Appearances are deceptive

(Image courtesy of criminalatt/

Word count:100 ~~~~~~~~~~
This is written in response to  Write Tribe’s 100 Words on Saturday 2014-12
The prompt this week:

“quite quietly”

For more short 100-word posts or to write one of your own , click on the link above!

100 Words on Saturday - Write Tribe



Categories: Parenting

Rajlakshmi · April 21, 2014 at 11:55 am

One shouldn't judge others on apprearances … beautiful poem, specially the ending

Danny Simon · April 21, 2014 at 3:41 pm

Loved the snap! I have one of my new born and my wife the same way….And amazing poem! Never realized it till the end!

Eli Z · April 21, 2014 at 4:33 pm

Hey, that was a nice twist.. and then I had to read it again- because it had this tender soft loving voice … beautifully written Shailaja

The Side I Hide · April 21, 2014 at 5:38 pm

Love the way the poem ends! 🙂
Beautifully written. 🙂

tulika singh · April 22, 2014 at 2:53 am

What a gem I missed Shailaja! That was beautiful. Glad I dropped back.

Beloo Mehra · April 22, 2014 at 4:41 am

I like that the response given to the person casting a judgmental look is very tender. Makes the point of the piece very nicely. Very well written.

Carol Graham · April 22, 2014 at 6:57 am

You pulled at my heart strings more than once with this one. Well done, as always

Carol @ Battered Hope

Psych Babbler · April 22, 2014 at 8:32 am

Beautifully written! We are so quick to judge people without knowing the back story…

Shanmuga Priya Raj Kumar · April 22, 2014 at 6:26 pm

Beautiful.. Carried away!

Elsie Amata · April 22, 2014 at 7:38 pm

Boy did this bring me back to the days when my kids were young. I barely had time to breath let alone do any kind of make-up! Great words!!

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